I’ve taken an excerpt from the beginning of my 10th chapter. It’s explaining the environment, so it “tells” more than “shows”. The dialogue doesn’t start till a bit later.

Is my writing any good? Is my sentence structure, flow, description, and whatever else okay?
Thank you.

Excerpt:
The west side park of Lac du Bourget was overgrown with wild flowers and prairie grass, but this gardening was intentional. The higher social women, who found the exotic outlay intriguing, often met on the fields with their outdoor blankets, to sit and reminisce while waving amorously to the fishermen on the lake. Jane and her eldest cousin, Bridgette Claire, found a steady incline beside the grove of cherry blossoms. There they were joined with five other young ladies, one of whom boasted an engagement ring. The elders stationed themselves yards away, and as Jane thought, it was to distinguish themselves from the youthful who flaunted their bachelorhood for all to see. It was especially aimed toward the mature men who sported after fish along the opposing bank.
“I’ll be sitting with the elders soon,” said the first girl, holding out her hand and spinning the golden band around her frail finger.
Bridgette leaned closer to Jane with a whisper. “She would be the dream assistant for those fishermen, you know.”
“What do you mean?” asked Jane.
“With those talons, she would collect baskets of fish.”
The girls giggled.
“Maybe,” said Jane, “that’s why she’s getting married. She caught her man with the uncivil show of an eagle and he’s too frightened to leave her.”
Bridgette tried to swallow her hysterics and snorted. The band of young women hushed, looking in her direction. All had the similar expression of disgust.
“Pig,” one said.
“Well, than I belong,” said Bridgette. “This is the pen house, is it not? I thought I saw a cow wearing a woman’s hat.”
The girl gasped. “How terrible!”
“A shameful excuse for a woman,” said the newly engaged girl.
“Do farmers keep eagles in pens?” asked Jane to Bridgette.
The two lost themselves in laughter, Bridgette snorting a great deal before they found themselves abandoned by the group.

Opinions? Advice? Thank you.

Answer:

Answer by Theo Bammens
whats this easy 10 points all about?….

Question: Which’of’these’waring’labels are’the/dumbest?
Product Warnings:

“Do not use if you cannot see clearly to read the information in the information booklet.” — In the information booklet.

“Caution: The contents of this bottle should not be fed to fish.” — On a bottle of shampoo for dogs.

“For external use only!” — On a curling iron.

“Warning: This product can burn eyes.” — On a curling iron.

“Do not use in shower.” — On a hair dryer.

“Do not use while sleeping.” — On a hair dryer.

“Do not use while sleeping or unconscious.” — On a hand-held massaging device.

“Do not place this product into any electronic equipment.” — On the case of a chocolate CD in a gift basket.

“Recycled flush water unsafe for drinking.” — On a toilet at a public sports facility in Ann Arbor, Michigan.

“Shin pads cannot protect any part of the body they do not cover.” — On a pair of shin guards made for bicyclists.

“This product not intended for use as a dental drill.” — On an electric rotary tool.

“Caution: Do not spray in eyes.” — On a container of underarm deodorant.

“Do not drive with sunshield in place.” — On a cardboard sunshield that keeps the sun off the dashboard.

“Caution: This is not a safety protective device.” — On a plastic toy helmet used as a container for popcorn.

“Do not use near fire, flame, or sparks.” — On an “Aim-n-Flame” fireplace lighter.

“Battery may explore or leak.” — On a battery. See a scanned image.

“Do not eat toner.” — On a toner cartridge for a laser printer.

“Not intended for highway use.” — On a 13-inch wheel on a wheelbarrow.

“This product is not to be used in bathrooms.” — On a Holmes bathroom heater.

“May irritate eyes.” — On a can of self-defense pepper spray.

“Eating rocks may lead to broken teeth.” — On a novelty rock garden set called “Popcorn Rock.”

“Caution! Contents hot!” — On a Domino’s Pizza box.

“Caution: Hot beverages are hot!” — On a coffee cup.

“Caution: Shoots rubber bands.” — On a product called “Rubber Band Shooter.”

“Warning: May contain small parts.” — On a frisbee.

“Do not use orally.” — On a toilet bowl cleaning brush.

“Please keep out of children.” — On a butcher knife.

“Not suitable for children aged 36 months or less.” — On a birthday card for a 1 year old.

“Do not recharge, put in backwards, or use.” — On a battery.

“Warning: Do not use on eyes.” — In the manual for a heated seat cushion.

“Do not look into laser with remaining eye.” — On a laser pointer.

“Do not use for drying pets.” — In the manual for a microwave oven.

“For use on animals only.” — On an electric cattle prod.

“For use by trained personnel only.” — On a can of air freshener.

“Keep out of reach of children and teenagers.” — On a can of air freshener.

“Remember, objects in the mirror are actually behind you.” — On a motorcycle helmet-mounted rear-view mirror.

“Warning: Riders of personal watercraft may suffer injury due to the forceful injection of water into body cavities either by falling into the water or while mounting the craft.” — In the manual for a jetski.

“Warning: Do not climb inside this bag and zip it up. Doing so will cause injury and death.” — A label inside a protective bag (for fragile objects), which measures 15cm by 15cm by 12cm.

“Do not use as ear plugs.” — On a package of silly putty.

“Please store in the cold section of the refrigerator.” — On a bag of fresh grapes in Australia.

“Warning: knives are sharp!” — On the packaging of a sharpening stone.

“Not for weight control.” — On a pack of Breath Savers.

“Twist top off with hands. Throw top away. Do not put top in mouth.” — On the label of a bottled drink.

“Theft of this container is a crime.” — On a milk crate.

“Do not use intimately.” — On a tube of deodorant.

“Warning: has been found to cause cancer in laboratory mice.” — On a box of rat poison.

“Fragile. Do not drop.” — Posted on a Boeing 757.

“Cannot be made non-poisonous.” — On the back of a can of de-icing windshield fluid.

“Caution: Remove infant before folding for storage.” — On a portable stroller.

“Excessive dust may be irritating to shin and eyes.” — On a tube of agarose powder, used to make gels.

“Look before driving.” — On the dash board of a mail truck.

“Do not iron clothes on body.” — On packaging for a Rowenta iron.

“Do not drive car or operate machinery.” — On

Answer:

Answer by justasmalltowngirl
“Do not use for drying pets.” — In the manual for a microwave oven.”
or…
“Caution: Remove infant before folding for storage.” — On a portable stroller.”
its a tie -_-

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Question: Gerard Beale the backup Fullback?

http://www.stuff.co.nz/sport/league/4947260/Broncos-Gerard-Beale-the-bolter-for-Kiwis

Apparently Beale will be named tonight and he nearly replaced Lance as the starting fullback. If this is what the selectors are banking on for the future then I really dont expect the kiwis to do well in future tests. Obviously “The fish” is injured, so im guessing he would of been ahead of Beale in the pecking order, but what about Kevin Locke or even Jason Nightingale as the abck-up Fullback (Although I think he is a great winger).

Also he played for the Junior Kangaroos last year? What a joke the rules are there.

Answer:

Answer by Kol
He’s definitely got potential. No-one can argue that. Though, he has played only a handful of first grade games and not all of those were in the fullback position. NZ don’t really have any other viable options. Nightingale could play fullback but he’s one of the best wingers in the NRL at the moment. If they are grooming him for the eventual fullback spot, he can offer more than Lance eventually. But Australia certainly has the upper hand in the fullback position.

Question: How much do you think these watches are worth?
I saw a man on Twitter who says he owns over 50 watches made 1893-2005. He invited me to a website he has that shows some of them. I wrote down data on some of them. What are their values do you think?
1893 Patek Philippe gold pendant watch hand-wind hour and minute
1902 Vacheron Constantin gold engraved hunter case hand-wind hours, minutes, and seconds
1915 IWC silver snap open back hand-wind, hr, min & sec
1926 Patek Philippe gold hand-wind hr & min
1946 Longines platinum square watch hand-wind, hr, min & sec
1952 LeCoultre gold-filled hand-wind hr, min & sec
1953 LeCoultre gold self-wind hr, min, sec & power reserve
1953 Piaget sport hand-wind hr, min & sec
1956 Jaeger-LeCoultre steel hand-wind hr, min,sec & alarm
1970 Omega gold tonneau hand-wind hr & min
1970s Omega “Constellation” gold bracelet hr, min, sec, day & date
1970s Rolex “TurnOGraph” steel & gold bracelet, self-wind hr, min, sec, & date
1979 Piaget “Polo” gold bracelet hr & min
Tiffany “Classic” gold hand-wind hr, min & sec
Longines gold mesh bracelet 3 diamond dial hand-wind hr, min & sec
Cartier “Santos Dumont” gold hand-wind hr & min
Cartier “Tank LC” gold hand-wind hr & min
Vacheron Constantin “Historiques” gold hand-wind hr & min
Chopard “Happy Fish” gold many diamonds move over dial
Cartier “Baignoire Alongee” gold & diamonds on case all around dial

Answer:

Answer by miyuki & kyojin
We have many Cartier catalogs but none recent, “Baignoire Alongee” have diamonds cost $ 38,000 10-12 years ago, other watches double prices, so I assume cost $ 75,000-$ 80,000 now
Cartier “Santos Dumont cost $ 12,300 at 2008
Cartier “Tank LC” cost $ 12,100 at 2007
Round Vacheron Consatantin have samme movement cost $ 12,500 now, square and elliptical versions cost more maybe $ 15,000-$ 20,000
Chopard “Happy” watches cost $ 10,650 few year ago, probably more now, have floating diamonds over dial between two crystals
Tiffany “Classic” cost $ 3750 at last catalogs we have, probably $ 7500 now
Piaget “Polo” cost $ 26,100 at 2006
Rolex “Datejust TirnOGraph cost $ 9450 now
Omega tonneau cost $ 2800-$ 3100 at 1998, probably $ 6350-$ 6700 now
New Jaeger-LeCoultre “Memovox ahve date cost $ 14,500 steel
New basic Patek Philippe watches cost $ 17,400-$ 23,600, old one of 1893 and 1926 probably sell much higher at auction
1952 LeCoultre “Beau Brummel” cost $ 750 at website few years ago, maybe $ 1000-$ 1200 now

Question: What are your favorite movie quotes and what movie is it from? Mine are?
Breakfast Club:
“Well, I don’t know any lepers either but I’m not gonna run out and join one of their f***** clubs.” – Bender

Kiss Kiss Bang Bang:
“I’m for Genaro’s, but then, what do I know? I’m a bear. I suck the heads off of fish” – Bear on beer ad
“Talking monkey, yeah, yeah. Came here from the future, ugly sucker, only says “ficus”. ” – Gay Perry
“Wow! I was glad you had a gun in there. For a second, I actually thought you could do that, like it was some big gay thing.” – Harry

Pulp Fiction:
“Now look, maybe your method of massage differs from mine, but, you know, touchin’ his wife’s feet, and stickin’ your tongue in her Holiest of Holies, ain’t the same f**** ballpark, it ain’t the same league, it ain’t even the same f****’ sport. – Jules
“Jules, you give that f****** nimrod fifteen hundred dollars, and I’ll shoot him on general principle.” – Vincent

Animal House: “Fat, drunk, and stupid is no way to go thru life son”-Dean Wormer
Taterboy – that would be spoken between Harry and Perry.
Harry and Perry in Kiss Kiss Bang Bang of course!

Answer:

Answer by Tila
Donnie Darko:
Frank= “Why are you wearing that stupid man suit?”

The Royal Tenenbaums:
Richie: I wrote a suicide note.
Chas: You did?
Richie: Yeah, right after i regained conciousness.

Question: Why is it that when there are perfectly real and valid things to criticsize…?
… conservatives will continue to hallucinate additional ones?

It’s always mystified me how, whenever a politician on either side says or does something stupid, you’ll find people who distort it to something even more stupid and criticize that instead. But what’s really weird to me is that when the Obama administration is creating all kinds of grounds for valid criticism, there are people claiming things like “he wants to ban fishing”. What he actually did was create a task force to look into conservation measures. That might lead to some limits being placed on sport fishing, but with the goal of making sure the fish populations don’t die out, so if anything the goal is to preserve sport fishing.

Answer:

Answer by UNITED PLANKTON
liberals will put people out of work…obama has already cut off water to california farmers…why would it surprise anyone that he would also outlaw fishing?

Question: Please explain to me these simple phrases (English is my second language)?
I’ve just started watching “How an Economy grows and Why it doesn’t” on Youtube.
Here are some phrases in the movie that I can not understand, please give me some easy to understand explanations:

1) “Fishing by hand is no bucket of bass”. What is “bucket of bass”?
2) “This is survival, and that’s about all”. What is “that’s about all”
3) “The next day B and C make much sport of A’s invention”. What is “make much sport of”?
4) “A is nobody’s fool”. What is “nobody’s fool”?
5) What does this phrase mean: “Not everybody is cut out for self-deprivation”?
6) “I might want to eat them if I’m ever sick or something happens”. What is ” If I’m ever sick”
7) “man, what a pig-out”. What is “what a pig-out”? Why they use “2 fish” instead of “2 fishes”

Thank you very much!

Answer:

Answer by lilmegsx1
I’m English and I’m sorry but I can only help you with a few of the numbers.

4) By nobody’s fool I believe they mean “A” doesn’t do what anyone one wants and nobody controls him.

5) Not everybody can stand to deprive (go without) themselves of something.

7) To “pig out” is a phrase used to describe eating a lot of food sometimes very messily.
I don’t know why we do this, it’s just an unusual grammar rule we use for example we say 2 sheep instead of 2 sheeps.

I really hope I helped x

Question: Poll: If you could invent a new……….?
If you could invent a new sport what would it be and how do you play. Are there any rules? Just curious and I want to see what you guys think. Here’s mine: jelly fishing. You get a fishing hook and you throw it in a small pool, pond etc. Then you get it and fish out jelly jars packets etc. I know it’s stupid but I just like the idea of literally ” jelly fishing” How about yours?

Answer:

Answer by Lilika Q
horse basketball : basically like regular basketball, but with one catch: you have to ride a horse

Question: Just out of curiosity………?
Has anyone else been experiencing problems with their Yahoo! Answers and/or Yahoo! email?

I know this question doesn’t belong in “All Categories > Sports > Outdoor Recreation > Fishing” but I feel more comfortable asking here ’cause this pretty much the only section where I answer questions. Thanks.
Haha. Nice try to whoever reported my question.
Haha. Nice try to whoever reported my question.
Hong=I That’s what I’ve been dealing with. Internet Exploder keeps popping up every so often.
Jack Tex: That was FOUR days ago. I asked my question TWO days ago. Yahoo was done with their business when I asked this. You shouldn’t assume people don’t pay attention.
Hazel H: Amen. Lotta good folks around here. A few not-so-good folks too.

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